这是《不如归去》的英文翻译写的文章——
写在《不如归去》公映之后
On the Release of SBU DV “Dreams In Between”
By Leese | 二月 24, 2011
到达西雅图不久，就欣闻石溪大学中国留学生自编、自导、自演的DV三部曲之三《不如归去》（英文名 Dreams In Between）将很快在学校公映。西雅图正是冬季、雨季，阴雨连绵，刚来的几天很是郁闷。当我听到这样好消息，心情顿然明朗了不少。
Shortly after arrival in Seattle, I was happy to hear that “Dreams in Between,” the third work in a Stony Brook movie series shot by Chinese students, was to be premiered on campus in a few days. The news came at a time when I was a bit blue due to the rainy winter of Seattle, dispelling the gloomy mood and bringing me a much sunnier one.
影片首映日期似乎也经历了不少波折，变更不止一次。当在2011年2月19日晚终于揭开面纱时，石溪的乡亲们肯定已经万分期待了。记得刚听说片子筹拍的消息时，是一年多以前。当时导演说，计划用一年时间完成拍摄，尽量把石溪的四季都展现出来。所有的创作人员都是业余义务参加，他们不为名利，只是想讲述留学生自己海归和海未归的故事。一年过去了，他们在繁重的工作和学习之余，主要靠周末进行，其中的辛苦不言而喻。
It seemed that the premier date changed more than one, which poses a real ordeal to the film crew. The movie was finally released on the evening Feb. 19, 2011, after long expectations of the Stony Brook audience. It was more than one year ago when I heard about the preparation of this movie. The director planned to get it done in about a year, so as to cover all four seasons in the outdoor scenery. Working or studying full time, the crew members could only spare time on it at weekend. I could not imagine how hard it had been for them to dance between the two careers – word/study and movie-making – in the past year.
如今作品如期出台，衷心为他们感到高兴。我认为无论好坏，对于剧组来说，都是一种体验，一种尝试。
I feel happy for them upon the long-awaited release of their work. I don’t think it matters a lot whether the movie will be a big hit, but what does matter is that the process is a unique experience and exploration for every member of the team.
电影在石溪公映时，我远在西海岸，无法亲临现场为他们喝彩。但是从网络上的热评，我感受到了他们的成功。仅仅数日，MITBBS（即北美华人常说的“买买提”）满满几页的主题贴都是讨论它的，而每帖里所搭的楼更是一幢高过一幢。在国内网站上也受到热评，很快就上了新浪播客原创头条。我想论坛中的留言无论是赞扬还是批评，都说明影片引发了观众的思考，这本身就是很大的成功。
When the movie was shown, I was in the west coast and unable to give my applause in person. Nevertheless, I felt its success by reading various comments posted online. Within several days after the premier, it became a popular topic on MITBBS and each post is followed by numerous responses. The same happened in domestic Chinese websites, with the show soaring to the top video list on <www.sina.com.cn> in a surprisingly quick speed. The huge volume of response, either positive or negative, shows that the story is at least thought-provoking, which I consider stands as a real achievement by itself.
在为影片推出高兴的同时，也为自己的粗心感到内疚。字幕翻译中有一些错误没有检查出来，就交工了。辜负了孙导的信任，而且还收受了人家女一号的贿赂呢，正宗的南京盐水鸭，味道很好。（第一次见到女一号，就暗赞其美貌和气质，百分百的大美女。）眼看着翻译交差的期限就到了（记得定的是12月中旬），却正值期末临近，考试阅卷之余，日夜赶工。翻译完后，在电脑上检查了一下，没有来得及打印出来纸质校对，就发出去了。这时再看，发现还有错误。希望在作成正式的光碟时，导演能够让我改正一下。尽管观众大多为中国人，不大会关注翻译，但是万一英语观众看得话，岂不给影片抹黑。
While being happy with the success of the movie, I meanwhile feel guilty of my own carelessness in the subtitle translation. I failed to correct some errors before submitting it to the editor, despite his trust in me and the “bribery” of the delicious Nan Jing Salted Duck from the leading actress gave. (I was amazed at her beauty and elegance when I first met her last year. She is indeed pretty.) The submission deadline of the translation somewhat coincided with my end-of-semester rush. I fought for it day and night in addition to dealing with a crazy exam and grading schedule, so I did not check it on paper before sending it. Re-reading the translation now, I am ashamed to find there are errors not detected. I hope to have a chance to correct them when the movie is made into formal DVD version. Although the errors are very unlikely to be noticed by the Chinese audience, they might be by English speakers. I don’t want them to be negative marks on such a well-made movie.
有些地方还是费了不少脑细胞。记得翻译麻将那段，我不会打麻将，完全不懂那些麻将术语的意思，Google 了好多篇麻将入门文章，才勉强明白。另外，一些成语，如“破釜沉舟”、“道不行，乘桴浮于海”也是不小的挑战。无论如何，东西已经完成，是好是坏，由观众评说。尽管我暗自祈祷，翻译错误不会被发现，但是已经出来了，只好厚着脸皮等着挨批了：）。
To get a natural rendition was quite effort-demanding in some places. For instance, when doing the episode on Mahjong play, I searched for introductory articles on Google just to understand the terminology since I myself had never played the game and knew nothing about it. Other phrases that presented considerable challenges are Chinese idioms such as “破釜沉舟”、“道不行，乘桴浮于海.”Now the work is done, and it is up to the audience to rate it as good or bad. I silently wish that the audience would not find those translation errors. Now that the work is already done, I had no choice but to stand criticisms.
观后感
总体感觉，影片取景很美，拍摄水平很高，音乐动人，故事脉络清晰。好评已经很多，我不再重复。不足之处，网络论坛讨论得很热，也很杂，但是不一定完全对。我感觉主要有两个地方：第一，演员有点太年轻，和故事中的经历不太搭配。当然，这是客观条件所限，能够找到的演员大多刚毕业，甚至还在读。第二，部分场景的服装设计欠妥。主要是有些场景的着装过于花（或者时尚），不符合美国主流文化的做法。比如女一号上班时穿黑丝袜（买买提上已有讨论）。再就是，男女主角家中办聚会，参加者（尤其是女性）着装过于正式。一般的聚会，应该不需要如此。
My comments
A general impression after watching the movie is that it presents beautiful scenes, superb photography and well-done music as well as a neatly-narrated story. Positive comments are widespread online, thus I would like not to repeat them here. Negative ones are massive too. Some of which are quite well-grounded, and others may not make much sense. I personally feel there are two obvious weaknesses. One is that the actors are sort of too young to fit the story. Of course this is somewhat inevitable since the Chinese community at Stony Brook consists mainly of students who just graduated or are still in school. The other is that the cast is overdressed on certain occasions, or in other words, too flowery and fashionable than appropriate. One case is a work scene in which the heroine wears black stocking, which does not accord with mainstream American culture. Overdressing also occurs in the scene of party at home, where attendants at ordinary parties generally do not require formal attire.
无论好坏，我觉得影片能够完成，就已经是很大的成功了。既然自娱自乐，没有必要按照专业的标准来要求作品。专业制作的所谓大片又何尝没有缺点呢？更何况《不如归去》已经优于许多专业作品了，至少我是这么认为的。在看巨资制作的《让子弹飞》时，我没有看到一个好的故事，但是在看这部零投资影片时，我看到了故事，思考了，而且进入情节了。所以，《不如归去》很成功，向全体剧组人员表示祝贺。
As is said before, the completion of the movie by itself is a remarkable success no matter whether it is well-made or not. It is unnecessary or unfair to judge a just-for-fun film by professional standards, not to mention that even professional works are not without weaknesses. In fact, I would rate “Dreams In Between” higher than many so-called big hits. For instance, the famous “Let the Bullets Fly” (2010) directed by Jiang Wen did not attract me when I watched it, however this movie as a virtually zero-funding one did lead me into the story and make me think about a lot. To be short, “Dreams In Between” earns a success, and I extend my sincere congratulations to all members of the production crew.
附（1）：蔡琴《庭院深深》歌词
多少的往事已难追忆
多少的恩怨已随风而逝
两个世界几许痴迷
几载的离散欲诉相思
这天上人间可能再聚
听那杜鹃在林中轻啼
不如归去不如归去
啊…. 不如归去
附（2）：《不如归去》在线链接
(a) In the news 新闻报道: 留美中国学生自编自导拍留学生活DV剧在校园上映
<http://news.sina.com.cn/o/2011-01-31/112921904641.shtml>
(b) 预告片Trailer:
<http://www.tudou.com/programs/view/fah6xBTNzjk/>
(c) 完整影片
(1) Youtube
<http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=MN2WrA8TGjE>
通过窗口右下角标识“CC”的按钮打开或者关闭中英双语字幕。
(2) Youku 优酷
<http://v.youku.com/v_show/id_XMjQ1NDM2MjI4.html>
(3) 56
<http://www.56.com/u13/v_NTg0Nzg5MDY.html>
(4) Tudou 土豆
<http://www.tudou.com/programs/view/USy2dVop3HI/>
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