英译 陈子昂 登幽州古台

八十一子

登幽州古台  

陈子昂  

前不见古人，
后不见来者。
念天地之悠悠，
独怆然而涕下。

Atop the Ancient Observatory of You-Zhou

Chen Zi-Ang  

Ahead of me I can see no one,
Nor can I anyone behind.
So timeless and vast are the sky and the earth,
In utter desolation I let down tears.

waspking

81兄好！译的不错

你是文科的吧？ 俺不太懂（懂的都忘了）

俺也打油一次（难得）：

the legendary ones long gone
successors are yet to come
between the earth and sky
me alone tears raining down.

语婷

俺也打油一次（难得）：

the legendary ones long gone
successors are yet to come
between the earth and sky
me alone tears raining down.
waspking 发表于 2009-4-25 12:23 AM

前三句都很精彩～～
最后一句好象应该是me alone。。。。浸透在悲怆里。。。什么什么tears..?
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嘿嘿～～不捣乱了.

waspking

translated by Waspking

the legendary ones long gone
successors are yet to come
between the vast earth and sky
sadly alone，my tears rain down.

八月风

Looking ahead I see no legend
Looking behind I see no follower
Thinking the wild sky and earth
In loneliness my tears pouring

海外逸士

no one  is not  古人

独怆然?

语婷

这是俺的解释。觉得他是在念英雄。。。。

Atop the Ancient Observatory of You-Zhou

The legendary heroes were long gone
Succeeding warriors were nowhere to be found
Standing alone between the sky and ground
I was in tears moaning them

还是觉得最后一句有些弱。。。不仅是为逝去的英雄感伤，而且还缅怀他们。。不仅是为时代呼唤英雄，而且还为没有英雄而失望。。。

咋就是没有一两个英文词可以表达这一切啊？
不然咱们一起，造一个？

ms_lt

你们的翻译都很有特色呀，但你们是不是都该在注意一下韵脚呢？
当然原诗也没有用韵。

八十一子

2# waspking

Very good.
Now there is a difference between translation and interpretation, isn't it? You are probably right to choose the latter. :)

waspking

yes, I guess when I have to choose one, I choose the later.
of course it is always better to have BOTH if possible.

August's first two lines are closer to the original than mine...

八十一子

10# waspking

是。最好是把她和我结合起来 （Oops! I meant hers and mine... Still not quite what I meant :) )

登幽州古台  

陈子昂  

前不见古人，
后不见来者。
念天地之悠悠，
独怆然而涕下。

Atop the Ancient Observatory of You-Zhou

Chen Zi-Ang  

Looking ahead I see no legend,
Looking back I see no followers.
So timeless are the heaven and the earth,
In utter desolation I let down tears.

fancao

8# ms_lt
梦丝妹子，
这首诗是用韵的，“者”可以读成类似于“眨”的音。“下”可能发成类似于三声的“哈”。试试看？

fancao

10# waspking

是。最好是把她和我结合起来 （Oops! I meant hers and mine... Still not quite what I meant :) )

八十一子 发表于 2009-4-26 01:44 PM

哈哈，吃豆腐嘴快！
这里的“SO"，有必要吗？

ms_lt

8# ms_lt
梦丝妹子，
这首诗是用韵的，“者”可以读成类似于“眨”的音。“下”可能发成类似于三声的“哈”。试试看？
fancao 发表于 2009-4-26 03:01 PM

谢灵芝姐姐解释， 原来如此!

姐姐肚子里有多少学问呀？

waspking

yeah, but her two lines were based on mine...so....
11# 八十一子

八十一子

15# waspking
Right! :)
Those two lines are simple and elegant.

八月风

老八，总觉得第三句不够满意。除了凡草说的用不着"so”，好象还是没有翻出"悠悠"的味道。

10# waspking

是。最好是把她和我结合起来 （Oops! I meant hers and mine... Still not quite what I meant :) )

登幽州古台  

陈子昂  

前不见古人，
后不见来者。
念天地之悠悠，
独怆然而涕下。

Atop  ...
八十一子 发表于 2009-4-26 01:44 PM

waspking

it is not clear whether the "前“、”后“ is referring to time or space here...I thought it was time, but looking back, maybe space here also. since 古人by definition would be dead...

忘语

I give it a try for fun as well...

The past sages I’ve never met,
Nor any of th’future ones yet.
Behold, the universe so vast,
Alone I’m here, shedding tears fast.

fancao

忘语 发表于 2014-2-15 06:38 AM
I give it a try for fun as well...

The past sages I’ve never met,

匆匆时去，久不见81了。

忘语

fancao 发表于 2014-2-15 01:54 PM
匆匆时去，久不见81了。

这就应了那句‘天下没有不散的宴席’ －－－－不过，分久必合嘛，呵呵呵

fanghua

fancao 发表于 2009-4-26 03:01 PM
8# ms_lt
梦丝妹子，
这首诗是用韵的，“者”可以读成类似于“眨”的音。“下”可能发成类似于三声的“哈 ...

可是，可是还是没有韵呀！
凡草给朗诵一下？！

也问八爷好！

fancao

fanghua 发表于 2014-7-22 01:40 AM
可是，可是还是没有韵呀！
凡草给朗诵一下？！

哈，你找一个说闽南话的同学读一下就明白了，一定比我解释的好。台语是否和闽南话相近？

fanghua

fancao 发表于 2014-7-22 10:33 AM
哈，你找一个说闽南话的同学读一下就明白了，一定比我解释的好。台语是否和闽南话相近？ ...

啊，是的，“者“和“下“，闽南语的韵是一样的－ａ　！