雨 霖 铃----柳永bilingual

海外逸士

寒蝉凄切,对长亭晚，骤雨初歇。都门帐饮无绪，留恋处、兰舟催发。执手相看泪眼，竟无语凝噎。念去去、千里烟波，暮霭沉沉楚天阔。
多情自古伤离别。更那堪、冷落清秋节。今宵酒醒何处，杨柳岸、晓风残月。此去经年，应是良辰、好景虚设。便纵有、千种风情，更与何人说。

Cicadas in cold with sad chirping,
Facing the arbor in twilight,
When heavy rain just stopping.
Drinking in the tent before the capital gate, listless,
Where we linger,
But the magnolia yacht urging to set sail.
Hand in hand, looking at each other with tearful eyes.
Speechless after all like with frozen throat.
Thinking of departing:
Through thousand miles of mists and waves,
The dusk so hazy, the southern sky so vast.
Being sentimental, always grievous of parting since time of yore.
Moreover, how can I bear
The solitary autumn festival.
Where am I tonight when sober from drunkenness?
The shore with willow trees,
The morning winds, the lingering moon.
A year from now on,
Should be a good time,
But pretty scenes set up in vain.
Even though there are thousands of feelings,
Yet whom can I impart to?

云天

逸士先生美译！
这次不只学习了，还照葫芦画瓢涂了两下。 很久前自己曾涂过。

Hang in hand----- hand in hand?   typo?

逸士先生周末愉快！   :)



寒蝉凄切,对长亭晚，骤雨初歇。都门帐饮无绪，留恋处、兰舟催发。执手相看泪眼，竟无语凝噎。念去去、千里烟波，暮霭沉沉楚天阔。

多情自古伤离别。更那堪、冷落清秋节。今宵酒醒何处，杨柳岸、晓风残月。此去经年，应是良辰、好景虚设。便纵有、千种风情，更与何人说。

In cold the cicadas chirping
Facing the long pavilion in twilight
When heavy showers just stopping.
No mood to drink before the capital gate
Where we linger
The magnolia boat urging to embark.
Hand in hand, gazing at each other’s sobbing eyes
Choked without a word.
Thinking of departing
Ahead lies a voyage of thousand miles of misty waves
The dusk so hazy, the southern sky so vast.

Sentimental minds always infiltrated with woes at parting since time of yore
Let alone, in the season of cold lonesome autumn.
Where will I be tonight upon waking up from drunkenness
By the willow bank,
In the morning breeze, under the waning moon.
A year from my departure
Should be a good time
But fine scenes set up in vain.
Even though there’re thousands of feelings
To whom can I tell?

云天

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1# 海外逸士

海外逸士

should  "hand in hand".  thanks for pointing it out for me.

海外逸士

你的譯文也基本達意。有幾處探討。
第一句“淒切”漏掉了。第四句﹐你的理解是無情緒飲酒。我的理解是雖在飲酒﹐
情緒不高。不知誰的理解對。“冷落”好像沒有“冷”的意思。WANE指月亮由圓而
虧。這裡的殘月應指月亮還沒落下去而仍留在天上。

云天

多谢逸士先生百忙中过目并指正！  

是，“淒切”漏掉了。
“listless”，读起来蛮好。無情緒或情緒不高，差不太多吧。
那么“清秋”的“清”有冷的意思吗？
殘月， 谢释疑。
欧读诗词一向囫囵吞枣。汗颜。

受益！多谢逸士先生！  :)

云天